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ok im goen for a job and i need some help any1 good at english/coverleaters can you tell me what you think of this
Dear Andrew Drever,
I would like to apply for the position of Key Operator Photocopier/Printing if it is still available.
While I have never worked in a printing shop I am not only a very fast learner but also enjoy learning new things. For example I am currently teaching myself the Russian language, while quite difficult I am finding it very rewarding
I am a hard worker and don’t mind going the extra mile to get a job done well. While I am not a perfectionist I see my work as a reflection of myself and therefore aim to produce the best possible results regardless of the task.
I pride myself on my customer service skills, which I have perfected over the past two years as a floor person in my role I was required to go that extra step as part of our “Experience the difference” philosophy. In doing so I was required to be not only cheerful and polite but also most important helpful and sincere.
I also excelled at selling in the candy bar. This is where I drew my most sense of accomplishment when I was able to have someone come up wanting a coke and leaving with a meal, and not only that but be happy with there purchase. My candy bar figures are always high and I often have friendly competitions with workmates to see who can get the most combo sales
Shifts are not an issue for me I am more than happy to work whatever hours or days are required of me including weekends and night shifts, and overtime
While I do currently reside in Brisbane I am more than happy to relocate to Caulfield for this position and I am available to start as soon as you require
Yours sincerly
Ben Hart
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I also excelled at selling in the candy bar. This is where I drew my most sense of accomplishment when I was able to have someone come up wanting a coke and leaving with a meal, and not only that but be happy with there purchase. My candy bar figures are always high and I often have friendly competitions with workmates to see who can get the most combo sales


I don't quite understand what you are saying here. I'm guessing it is a previous job, but you may want to mention that. Otherwise, it sounds really good. Good Luck!
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OK, here is how I would do it. I just copy/pasted and changed stuff that I think is wrong. Sometimes I can find stuff:
Dear Mr. Andrew Drever,
I am interested in applying for the position of Key Operator Photocopier/Printing if it is still available.
Although I have never worked in a printing shop, I am a very fast learner and enjoy learning new things. For example, I am currently teaching myself the Russian language. While it can be quite difficult at times, I am finding it very rewarding, personally.
I am a hard worker and do not mind going the extra mile to get a job done well. I see my work as a reflection of myself and, therefore, aim to produce the best possible results, regardless of the task.
I pride myself on my customer service skills, which I have perfected over the past two years as a floor associate. In my role, I was required to perform my tasks as part of our “Experience The Difference” philosophy (where?). In doing so, I was required to be not only cheerful and polite, but most important, helpful and sincere.
I excelled at selling in the candy bar (where?). This is where I drew the most sense of accomplishment. For example, when someone came to me for a soft drink and happily left with a whole meal, that gave me a sense of accomplishment. My candy bar figures are always high, and I often have friendly competitions with workmates to see who can get the most combo sales.
Shifts are not an issue for me. I am more than happy to work whatever hours or days are required of me, including weekends, nights, and overtime.
I currently reside in Brisbane, however, I am more than happy to relocate to Caulfield for this position. I am available to start as soon as you require.
Sincerely,
Ben Hart
Ok man....that is what I found. Hope it helps.
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Hiya sweetie...not much on commas and periods, are ya? :)This is how I would fix this up. What, specifically, does being Key Operator Photocopier/Printing involve? Why would you be good at it? I'd stick that in somewhere.

Date
Your address
goes here
Andrew Drever
Title
Address
Dear Mr. Drever,
Please consider me for the position of Key Operator Photocopier/Printing.
I am not only a very fast learner but also enjoy learning new things. For example, I am currently teaching myself Russian. While it is quite difficult, I find the process very rewarding.
I am a hard worker and don’t mind going the extra mile to get a job done well. While I am not a perfectionist, I see my work as a reflection of myself and therefore aim to produce the best possible results regardless of the task.
I pride myself on my customer service skills, which I have perfected over the past two years as a floor person in the cinema. In that role, I was required to take that extra step as part of our “experience the difference” philosophy. In doing so I strove to be not only cheerful and polite but also -- most importantly -- helpful and sincere.
I also excelled at selling in the candy bar. This is where I drew most of my sense of accomplishment: When I was able to have someone come up wanting a Coke and leaving with a meal (and be happy with his purchase). My candy bar figures are always high and I often have friendly competitions with workmates to see who can get the most combination sales.
Shifts are not an issue for me. I am more than happy to work whatever hours or days necessary, including weekends, night shifts, and overtime.
While I do currently reside in Brisbane I am more than happy to relocate to Caulfield for this position and I am available to start as soon as you require.
Yours sincerely,
Ben Hart

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