Help Needed, Resume Review

[BlindBrick 0]

I've graduated and am about to begin the job hunting process. I took my resume to my college's career services office for advice and then some how managed to lose the revision notes during my move. I've made all the changes I could remember the CSO making but figure I forgot a few. Does anyone on here do this kind of stuff for a living? If so, would you mind taking a look at what I've got? Jsut PM me if so.

-Blind

"If you end up in an alligator's jaws, naked, you probably did something to deserve it."

[JohnRich 4]

Why not just post it here, or attach it?

[BlindBrick 0]

Well I didn't want to abuse the forums, but if HH and the mods are OK with it... If not, please feel free to zap the thread guys.

I'm basically looking at two different positions right now. Here's the resumes I've started to tailor to both with help from Deuce. They are definitely works in progress so I'd appreciate any input on either.

-Blind

"If you end up in an alligator's jaws, naked, you probably did something to deserve it."

[freeflir29 0]

Those look pretty good to me.

[lawrocket 3]

I'm looking at these resumes thinking, "What job is this guy applying for?"

I see: (1) a property manager position; and 2) McKee Foods Corporation.

Problem - it's the same resume for both.

What does the property management company care if you came up with an invetory system? Or a coordination plan between department? Big deal. Telling them you're seeking to empower tenants as you did at school? Come on, your the LANDLORD's advocate, not the tenants' advocate. Parachute rigger? Cool. But why not use that to say, "As a parachute rigger, I gained familiarity with regulatory backdrops and understanding of rules and systems, which is the foundation of property management."

Come on. You've got the time to tailor your resumes to your target employer. So you spend a half hour tinkering with each resume. So what? Do it, and your prospective employers will notice that you care. 10 well tailored resumes are vastly better than 1000 form resumes.

What classes did you take in school that will help with property management? Regulatory systems? Put that down. For your Foods position, think of what the job entails, and put down what you do and know specific to that job. They could care less about advocating for students.

When doing a resume, let them know - "This is how I can make you more money than those other clowns applying for a job" That will get you noticed.

"OBJECTIVE - A property manager position with Haley Rae Incorporated where my experience in residential management and my interpersonal skills, training in management operations and regulatory compliance, and organizational talents in property management will best be utilized, maximizing Haley Rae's efficiency and economic growth."

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"OBJECTIVE - A production supervisor position with Mc Kee Foods Corporation, where my leadership, training in capital management, organizational skills, and experience in maintenance, production operations and inventory systems will be utilized to maximize productivity and profit margin." Stress the inventory management system you developed for the hospital. Dont' make the employer find the good stuff in the middle of fluff on Page 2.


No more of this, "I want a job, I'm a leader, I'm organized, and I've got training, too." Give them details that they care about, and property managers couldn't care less about half the stuff on that resume, the same as McKee Foods.

p.s. - get your fonts straight and your paragraphs aligned.

edited to add: Sure, I sound harsh. Better from me than from prospective employers.

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[freeflir29 0]

Good stuff Lawrocket. I have to admit......I don't know much about applying for "Regular people" jobs. I have only had to go on a job search ONCE. Ever..... I only know what my niche industry wants to see.

[ladyskydiver 0]

Just a thought...you may want to remove your address/phone from the resumes you posted here....unless you don't mind everyone knowing where you live.

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[JohnnyD 0]

WAY too long. Font seems to change without reason or warning. Too difficult to integrate what experience went with what job (what is most recent and what is most relevant).

Just a personal - drop the skydiving. Its irrelevant in the business world. Many will disagree, saying it will set your resume apart. My feeling is that a person is going to look at your res for 2 minutes max before deciding if they really want to look deeper or shit can it. That is very valuable real estate on the page. I don't like to waste any of it on stuff that doesn't matter and as a person that receives resumes I feel that wastes my time and I shit can them.

[lawrocket 3]

Clay:

I got a law clerk resume last week from some dude. Here are some choice snippets:

1) "Unload delivery trucks and put merchandise in designated areas."
2) "Certified life guard"
3) "Interests - Working out (benchpress max 275 lbs, trained with Christina Aguilera)
4) "love to watch, read about, and play sports (met Michael Jordan and Keyshawn Johnson)."

My thoughts on reading this? "I care as much about that as the courts do." This is a law clerk position, not a Hollywood production assistant job. Employers don't want cool. They want you to make them money.

My wife is hotter than your wife.

[freeflir29 0]

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OMG......that's hilarious. Every time I look at my resume and think it sucks......I hope people like this are the only other ones applying for the position I want.

[Deuce 1]

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OMG......that's hilarious. Every time I look at my resume and think it sucks......I hope people like this are the only other ones applying for the position I want.

I want to see it.

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"Rides well in large leather chairs"

[freeflir29 0]

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"Rides well in large leather chairs"

"Expert "In flight entertainment system" operator on 757,767, and 777."

[BlindBrick 0]

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Just a personal - drop the skydiving. Its irrelevant in the business world.

I was actually told to put that in there on the theory that besides demonstrating ability as a trainer it shows I am familar with dealing with government regs and bureaucracy which applies to Critical Control Point logging in the production supervisor position and the Fair Housing Act in regards to the property manager gig.

-Blind

"If you end up in an alligator's jaws, naked, you probably did something to deserve it."

[CrazyIvan 0]

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OMG......that's hilarious. Every time I look at my resume and think it sucks......I hope people like this are the only other ones applying for the position I want.

Dude, once I got a HAND-WRITTEN RESUME, crooked lines and all, I'm serious.

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[JohnnyD 0]

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Just a personal - drop the skydiving. Its irrelevant in the business world.

I was actually told to put that in there on the theory that besides demonstrating ability as a trainer it shows I am familar with dealing with government regs and bureaucracy which applies to Critical Control Point logging in the production supervisor position and the Fair Housing Act in regards to the property manager gig.

-Blind

Then get to it.
I certainly didn't get that, but if it pertains put it in there in a manner that is both succinct and meaningful.

[freeflir29 0]

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once I got a HAND-WRITTEN RESUME, crooked lines and all, I'm serious.

Did they get extra credit for writing it with green crayon?

[CrazyIvan 0]

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once I got a HAND-WRITTEN RESUME, crooked lines and all, I'm serious.

Did they get extra credit for writing it with green crayon?

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Blue Skies and May the Force be with you.